(TFB-07-10 points) I was brought here by the Random Story button. I found the story to be confusing, not as the protagonist would which would be fine, especially waking up as she does, but more because of contradictory details. She tells us that she is naked and later reveals she is actually wearing clothes. The second paragraph seems solid. How can she tell there is no light with her eyes closed? I understand if I’m awake and the power goes out, that I’d be able to tell, but if I was waking up- I’m not so sure. The ’can’t see nothing’ threw me off more due to the grammar than anything else. I suppose if you plant the idea that she is a young drop-out then maybe it could be excused. The inventory of the body seems like a diagnostic on a robot instead of someone checking their body out. Wiggle her toes, roll her neck, or something! The ending was interesting and made me want to know more. So this is worrisome but not terrifying because she has been here before? Yikes. Hope this is taken as intended. Cheers! NR
Robert Quick