This is kind of ripping off that ‘Happy Time’ episode on ‘Angel’, one of the best episodes ever.

Hmm…. I’m interested. They didn’t even specify what type of printer paper… Well done, unique protagonist, keeps me wondering. 5/5

I love how you just launched into this, and then just didn’t stop. Originality and flair are abound here – there seem to be a couple of detectives touting for that ‘best one’ spot at the minute (including mine), but I think yours certainly wins for uniqueness!

The title is a little revealing perhaps, but other than that this is wonderful both technically and creatively. You’re on a roll at the minute lostgirl! MH :)

I love it! Unusal protag..enough of a story line to get you hooked..and leaves you with questions you want answered.
Very polished.