I like what you did with my freewriting session. Also, I think this is the first prequel I’ve had that actually made sense. Five pencils for you, sir.

This is an amazing idea and would be a fantastic backbone for a novel! Nice!

A very nice way of looking at things, and it kind of clears up the potentially confusing ‘Space Cadet’ thing as well…

Written well, and I like that SC sees through this motivational speech for what it really is, but actually couldn’t care much anyway – good characterisation! MH :)

I like the ideas you took from Elisabeth’s story to flesh out. This helps explain her story and produces the feeling of a bigger world behind the words (always a good thing).

ah, great prequel, and i really cant’ say much that anyone else hasn’t already :)