I liked this. A little over-angsty perhaps, but considering it’s a dramatic monologue, that isn’t such a bad thing… Nice how you’ve slowly built the character of the boy, which is difficult to do steadily when you’re writing first person. The last paragraph confused me a little, but I think I get it – either way this is intriguing and emotional throughout, a worthwhile read. MH :)
I liked this. A little over-angsty perhaps, but considering it’s a dramatic monologue, that isn’t such a bad thing…
Nice how you’ve slowly built the character of the boy, which is difficult to do steadily when you’re writing first person.
The last paragraph confused me a little, but I think I get it – either way this is intriguing and emotional throughout, a worthwhile read. MH :)
Hmm, I thought it was a girl, but it could go either way…
I see the central character as a girl, and the person she’s talking about as a boy… Does that clear it up, sorry, I was quite vague before. MH:)
Oh, I see =] I get it now.
A girl and a grown-up (of either sex), I thought. Quite possibly even a very professional therapist.
-The title suggests it was a male and probably an elder family member, such as father in the first place.
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