The ends a bit weak, but you continue to develop the character as a pretty decent ‘head-bitch’…

I’m worried that you’re not actually moving the plot anywhere – you have a good character but unless you give her other characters to play off, and a plot to work within, it won’t work for the longterm…

Something to think about – this installment isn’t bad, but make sure you know where you’re going. MH :)

I have to agree with Ed, it seems as this isn’t going anywhere. I mean, all she’s basically doing is bitching about everyone being so sucking and dropping the f-bomb way too unnecessarily.