this is utterly heart breaking! this poor girl…

That is soo sad. You have a talent with emotion – any sad situation you can convey the character’s feelings incredibly well.
Gratz on this…it’s good stuff
Abby x

This is wonderfully heartbreaking. You definitely have a gift for conveying emotion in your writing. I’m not sure I understand the “to the moon” aspect of it, but that doesn’t detract from its impact.

I think ‘to the moon’ is a continuation of ‘I love you’ so it comes out as ‘I love you to the moon’, as in, alot.

The point of view obviously lends itself well to maximising emotion and impact, which you handle well – I wonder how old this girl is…? Anyhoo, good work, MH :)

Holds the attention – impressive stuff!