Oh creepy. I like your italicised noises, they remind me of when noises are written in children’s books, whereas stuffy novels prefer to just describe what it sounds like…

I much prefer it this way!

A really nice entry to the challenge – boy, this kids imagine is running away with him… MH :)

I had to cut out a lot, so I’m glad this worked for you :)

Wow, that kinda creeped me out…

Haha, me creeped out.

Definitely worked for me. It had that scary feel but without going so overboard that it couldn’t be something innocuous, despite the narrator’s dark imaginings.

Nice read, what an imagination! definitely got something there. Well Done!
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