This could be the setup for a really interesting story…I’m curious as to whether it’s about the creation of our world, or the start of a new one.

Nicely told, even though it’s an overview of lots of time it still has a very accessible and familiar feel to it. Cool idea, and I alwasy love a message of hope, however long it takes to get to that point.

This is really very interesting, though I’m not sure it’s technically space opera in nature. One technical point you need to fix:

“…since he burst into existence in its own system…”

In that phrase it should be either “he” and “his” or “it” and “its.” The pronouns don’t agree the way it is currently written.

I’m interested to know if your version of humanity finds redemption or if they revert to their previous nature and continue on in their destruction.

Thanks for the fix kaellinn18.

As usual when trying to fit a story into a ficly it’s been through a few changes. I did have a character element at one point, but it’s difficult to put short life-time characters into a long term epic without their presence giving the story disjointed feel with token characterisations. So in the end I booted them for the wider implications of the story. So, no personal element, and so not quite meeting the demanding space opera requirements of the challenge.

Redemption? Only in passing – another cycle. The story was intended to echo on a grander scale the history of man on earth, discovering other peoples, losing and refinding older civilisations, rediscovering lost ideas.

someday_93 – Earth populates solar system and repeats older mistakes on a grander scale. Eventually discovers the dawn of intelligent life in another system that parallels man’s own origins. I’m not saying it’s the same type of life, something other than our DNA chemistry, but maybe similar progress of cellular structures, similarity of morphology, which might be an inevitable pattern that forms around a central control (nervous) system and a physical interface (limbs and senses)?

“All of this has happened before, and it will happen again.”

—Battlestar Galactica

Trust me…bringing that to mind is a compliment.

Damn dirty apes!!!