For the most part, the imagery and ideas here are very inventive and well-written, I just feel that towards the end there’s a little too much ‘tell’ and not enough ‘show’ – privatised militia driving to Equalitech? Too much information!

Still, an interesting way to sequel – I’ll be keeping an eye on this… MH :)

Again, you have to break this down to clearer paragraphs, but other than that interesting sequel, a lot more mystery.