What I love about this challenge is that it’s showcasing all the elements of movies that add together to make the blockbusters work -you’ve captured really well that old classic – the countdown!

I would have liked to see some backstory or psychology behind the characters, but nonetheless you’ve got some great scene-setting in the second paragraph, and suitably techy language throughout… Good entry! MH :)

I love the “missing would be unprofessional” line. Very matter-of-fact, with a twinge of dark humor. However, that is offset by the completely unpatriotic use of the metric system.

You may have run out of space here, but I would have preferred a mention of her holding her breath to steady for the shot rather than her finger squeezing. It’s probably more cliche, but I also think it’s slightly more dramatic.

Overall, it has a good sense of pace and the atmosphere is pretty much spot-on. Well done.

Don’t be hating on the metric system, John! They use it in Star Trek, and Star Trek is the REAL future, I tell you!

The metric system is unpatriotic and proves that you don’t support our troops.

And the real future has been outlined by the great Robert Zemekis in his seminal documentary about the future, Back to the Future 2. Stephen Spielberg is currently working on Jaws 5 through 18 right now, so that he can premier Jaws 19 in the summer of 2015.