Getting interesting. Tell me more.
Wonderful continuation of the moment. Very tense, and yet it keeps the feel of “business as usual” going. I think the pacing is still very well done. The only critique I have is that I believe “body armored” should be hyphenated to read “body-armored.”
Wonderful continuation of the moment. Very tense, and yet it keeps the feel of “business as usual” going. I think the pacing is still very well done.
The only critique I have is that I believe “body armored” should be hyphenated to read “body-armored.”
Awesome :) Love the feel to the whole thing! Great work!
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