Digging the concept here, but the writing felt rushed and kinda lost me.

Enigma’s warnings weren’t real believable, assuming that’s a computer.

Also…typo in the last sentence: “latter” should be “ladder.”

This doesn’t reach the levels of atmosphere and tension seen in the first few – rushed is the word, and I don’t think it suits the main character to be flippant – he might be brave, but I don’t think he underestimates the gravity of the situation…

I kind of disagree with Ben about the computer though, I like that it has a more human feel to his dialogue – I just feel you need to build on the MC’s relationship with Enigma, it’s a potential point for some really original writing…

This hasn’t in any way killed the series though – just make sure you pick up the standard with some good narrative and maybe some snappy intercom back to Enigma from the Earth’s surface – MH :)