Ha! This is brilliant! As soon as I read ‘Abra Kebabra’ I knew I was on to a winner and it doesn’t disappoint – you’ve smashed those romantic stereotypes out the window with your comedy baseball bat and added a humdinger of an ending in there for good measure…

From a technical point of view, I would recommend breaking this into clearer paragraphs for readability, but the content is well pitched, and the swearing is justified, not gratuitous, which I appreciate. MH :)

Thanks. I really appreciate that.
Also thanks for your comments regarding technical aspects. I make no secret that grammar is my enemy. I have hundreds of ideas for stories but I do occasionally find it difficult to put them into words. Practice makes perfect I guess.
Thanks Again.
AG

Ha. This is hilarious.

I agree with Ed, this would read better more seperated.

I’m not as metaphorically inclined has, MH, but I will say this was a funny piece.