Despite what anyone thinks, this is not going in the direction you think it is.

¿Qué es? = what is it?

Qué bueno, = how good

su familia = your family

& I know it’s a bit cliched.

yeah cuz, i’m thinking it’s going in THAT direction, but you say it’s not.. so i have to trust you. ;)

It’s not! I’m serious!

This sentence you need to take out the extra ‘know’ :
“he want to know anyone to know "

and

why would his heart sink while he felt good inside? am i just missing something? or a mistype?

sorry for pointing out these mistakes. tell me if you want me to stop!

Very nice. Yeah, I can see how it could lead in THAT direction, but I see so much more potential for this. MOAR!

Hey, it’s a metaphor, but I used it differently. It sank, but in a good way, if that makes any sense.

I like where this is going, even though I’m not sure where that is. I’m getting an undertone of sinister and I’m liking it.