This seems to have a lot of ideas going for it, but they’re all a bit loose – you don’t tie them
together in an engaging way…

The idea of the texts saved to drafts stood out for me, tells us loads about the character in a short time – clever. The spelling and grammar’s not great – make sure you always capitalise after a full stop and perhaps break this into clearer paragraphs.

It’s got something going for it, but I’m not quite sure what… MH :)

There is a lot of angst in this ficly. Has a person you loved …died? Hold your sweet memories, but move on as they would have wanted you to.

if not marli, she’s as good as dead..

or he’s afraid to make something of it. Afraid to contact her and mess it all up, the life she has. Even though it haunts him.

Though, Why did she stop responding 3 months before?

*ponders

So just FYI, there is a reason why it was written how it was, I know how to use proper grammar and punctuation and what not, read my other work, but a good reader should think of the purpose of the writers intent when they write in such a manner.

There is no angst, it’s a story. it’s ficly, where we can tell a story in 1024 character or simply let people think for themselves rather than giving all the answers away. I prefer the latter.