Nice moral.
Are you gonna continue? cuz that was a large set up for this tiny revelation..
What happens to the ‘Gob’?
And is this fact or fiction? :)

This comes back up to the standard of the first piece, rounding up the piece (or at least this part of it) nicely…

I feel like you got a bit lost with the second and third stories in this chain, but with regards to this installment, it scored a solid home run – MH :)

@ElshaHawk I will certain continue to add, but I hope others here at Ficly help me finish. What attracted me to Ficly was the opportunity to have writers far better than I am help to move a story I started.

@ElshaHawk Buckeye is real. As are the events described. The description of those events is fictional.

I enjoyed this little series very much! An interesting way to get your point across, and an entertaining example.

“Keep score” should be “keeping score” in your last paragraph.

I figured those stats were real :) I kind of feel in over my head reading this, but it’s very good historical fiction!

Since I don’t follow baseball, I didn’t follow all the terms you used – But what’s important is that you thoroughly enveloped us in your telling of this story.
In the second paragraph, the last sentence seems to be clarifying and adding to the sentence before it, so you could actually connect them with a colon for more of an Umph while reading it :P
also, “vigorous” should be “vigorously”, I do believe… Lovely story though!

P.S. (This makes me think of Psalm 131:2)

@Blossom Ruoquen, thanks.