Oh you really have pushed the boat out with this one…

A really cracking central character, a really good pace and tone and that last paragraph is brilliant! One of your best I think, I can’t really fault it – MH :)

This was really interesting and would have easily gotten five pencils from me, but I’m confused. How did he drive people insane if they can’t see or hear him? If no one can hear him, he’s basically talking to himself about the Financial Times.

Ah, thanks for pointing that out kaellinn, that was a mistake on my part. I’ve made the change so he simply can’t be seen but can be heard.

Wow, this was good, I enjoyed the narrator’s voice and Eli’s character even if we do only get a small chance to see it.

The first line was amazing…I haven’t ever read anything quite like this. I can’t think of anything constructive to say cause it’s super awesome how it is!