Wow…really great character development, considering the extremely curt conversation. Either these two men are in a romantic relationship, or Bill stole Jack’s french fries. Either way…something harsh is going on between them and it’s captured effortlessly in your writing.

One formatting nitpick. When Jack thinks “I hate you,” I feel like italics would be a better device than quotations. It would help set it apart, especially since the thought itself comes before we know it’s a thought.

It’s too mysterious for me, I am left feeling I don’t understand.