Really a great piece written here! The only thing that peeves me is that this relationship is so unhealthy, but I think that’s a good measure of how much you can feel what is written!

Yes! Unhealthy! isn’t is just? I’m glad that came through. that’s what I was going for: like an addiction that you crave, but it damages you as you’re getting your fix

This is an echo of – well- nearly all my damn relationships. Only thing that could improve it is punctuation at the end of lines.

The content of this is pretty good, but it doesn’t flow very well for me. The meter is not consistent. I like the rhyme scheme you used, though, especially the stanzas that end in the same word for the first three lines.

…. This was good. Makes me a bit curious.. but maybe I already know? Hmm.. anyway, I can here your hurt, love passion about this sub in your writings here. Good Job, Babe.