This is very good. It also seems very familiar to me. Was this from Ficlets?

At any rate, I like how the more advanced society is considered “the old way.” It’s like we knocked part of ourselves back to the stone age. Very intriguing!

Yeah, I just finished “The Earth Abides” by George R Stewart and couldn’t help but imagine another tribe that hadn’t abandoned technology so easily.

Good work here, reminds me a little of Avatar, but then maybe I’ve just got ‘Dancing with Smurfs’ on the brain…

Nice pacing, interesting way of telling things – I like the use of lists it adds a great atmosphere to it all!

My only qualm is whether something can ‘permeate from their very pores’ – permeate is to spread or move through, I don’t think anything can permeate from, if you catch my drift?

Still, a good story with lots of possibilities – good work! MH :)