Nice to see you going back to your fantastical roots Nathaniel, it really is a great genre to showcase your creativity and descriptive skill…

This story is no exception, a really intriguing launchpad for what could be an interesting series.

I’m not sure about describing the work as ‘tedious’ if you’re going to go on to say how she enjoys it, perhaps ‘for many, it was tedious work’, might get the message across more clearly?

But overall a stellar piece, good work! MH :)

Thanks, MH! I actually tossed that one line back and forth and I ended up leaving it as is because I wanted it to be a more general comment. As though it’s generally understood that building the cannelliare is tedious, but for the majeria it isn’t. I guess it didn’t come out sounding that way. I’d add more to it to clarify the statement more, but I’m already at the character limit. :)