Haha cool. Thanks for teaching me the word lampshaded (noted). I liked the personal touches that draw us closer to the character (and I mean late).
Only things I’d change is the Noone → No one, and I’ve never seen centuries written so. 16th C. or even 16th Century, but 16thc. doesn’t seam right.

Amended. But I had to cut a word out. My teacher always nags me on how I spell noone! Or no one…

I thinks it’s Katey and I, otherwise, I’m guessing this is time traveling. It’s always a bitch…

You couldn’t pick a better place to set this than Croydon!

Good work, although the ending is a bit rushed… I’m not worried about ‘me and Katey’ because this is first person, and somehow the proper English wouldn’t fit the character.

Lovely chip descriptions making me hungry, and you can’t go wrong with a swordfight can you? MH :)

Of course Ed would say something against my suggestion.

Ima agree with MH, not just because it makes me look better, but because the narrator wasn’t supposed to be a middle-class grammar nazi

Mr. Gabe- i agree with MH. i always like looking to see whether a character uses “____ and I” or “me and ____”

It’s an interesting characterization tool, because it says a lot about a character without giving a concrete description.

Me and Katey is awkward to read. I found myself focusing on the grammar rather than the narrative after reading that passage.

I know you’re not changing your story, and I’m fine with leaving it the way it is for characterization purposes. This is just FYI.

There’s an easy way to remember whether to use me/I in a sentence: remove the other party and see if it still makes sense.

1) The teller gave the money to (Katie and) me.

2) (Katie and) I went to the store.