Browncoatben

Nice scene here. I’m guessing Bill & Ted in 19th Century London (or some variation of). The description is well-timed and fluid.

A couple constructive nitpicks:
“Where were we?” I’d like to see italics there to distinguish an internal monologue.
“Carriages pulled by horses…” feels awkward. Perhaps “Horse-drawn carriages…”

Nice piece though!

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