he’s found her out! but will he get his job back? i think not. and is Ava the only mystery?

Lovely, very James-Bond-y moment there with the briefly described car chase. I would have thought he’d have pegged Ava earlier, but this at least makes it explicit. Besides it’s kind of fun to picture the look on his face as he has the realization.

I look forward to seeing / writing how Raff deals with this – after all he’s made some fairly elementary slip-ups, so he needs to redeem himself…

Good continuation, I like how you’ve ramped the pace up here, it gives the piece more variation – nice work – MH :)

Oh my! I love the increase in pace on this.