oh, nice! that last line is beautiful!

I think I’d leave off the sentence “I’ll tell you the truth.” A Captain in this particular position would be familiar with interrogation. I’ll tell you the truth is a big old red flag that whatever comes next won’t be the truth. Or is this your intention? If so, I’m not worthy! lol

I agree with Elsha. That last line is the stuff catchphrases are made of.