Hmm, interesting. So Jean’s mom has an incurable disease, but it doesn’t seem to be fatal. You did a decent bit of world-building in that small space at the end, too. Nice job!

Despite the obviously larger story behind this scene, it stands nicely on its own. If I may offer constructive comments, the introduction of characters to your scene gets a bit muddled in the opening paragraphs. Some greater clarity or detail about exactly what’s happening to Jean (e.g., bleeding out, seizing, etc.) would add some punch, too. And shouldn’t Logan be running somewhere? : )