I get that you’ve left some stuff unanswered, but I do find the various mentions of _’she_’ a little confusing…

You’ve captured the father / daughter relationship here really well, and I like how it links with the title and the genetic idea, that’s a poignant theme you’ve got yourself there!

Good work, if a little confused – MH :)

You’re missing a period at the end of your sentence and I felt as the she ran out of the room crying a bit random, but maybe that’s just me.

Nevertheless, I enjoyed this piece. I’m assuming that she was the whore of which you speak.

Oh dude editing error! Will amend. She represents my whore of a godmother.

ouch. painful conclusion there. This is kind of told in reverse, which is a great tool to practice. :) It’s a little choppy, dancing between the ’she’s’ and the descriptions, but the story is told and it has SNAP.

This was great, really strong, and blunt.