Incredibly well written at least from my limited knowledge but I’m hoping Elementary kids don’t talk like that.

I’m afraid to say I found this rather hard to follow, though judging from the previous review, I’m missing something…

What I can interpret is a high standard of writing, but possibly a bit convoluted – the link between story and title seems to be eluding me as well.

Apologies if my own ignorance is clouding my judgement – MH :)

I recognized this as a play of Peter Pan, but did not know who Cathy Rigby was/is. I now understand the connection between the title and the story. They gave the part to a woman due to the flying rig being terribly painful on the male genitalia.

Funny little story, and with the added research, even more humorous.

I agree with MH as there are a few lines that could be cleaned up a bit, but overall it was written well enough. At first I was imagining some sadistic performance where the actors were playing the part against their will, but the character names at the end shunned that idea.

I generally don’t actually LOL when I’m reading something, though your last two paragraphs made an exception. I agree with John Perkins that, while a strong story, the nuance is a little hazy at first. With the revelation it’s even stronger. As evolved and esoteric as I like to think my taste or sense of humor has become, a shot to the groin can always be funny.

thank you all for the kind words, and constructive criticism. Lots of love…

I have to agree with Ed, I didn’t exactly get this, but I guess I’m missing something.

But I did laugh at the last part.

Ha! Of course that’s why Peter Pan is always played by a girl . . . collateral, lateral damages!
Clever.

thnks. i had a friend named will (guy) who played peter a while ago, and he said his tinker-bells really took a beating

Good stuff, and the title fits perfectly. I love that you made them elementary students (and, yes, they probably do talk like that) and that the audience clapped again at the end.

I enjoyed this all the way, marbles was a most felicitous choice of terminology, especially as you have relocated them from the brain.