Comments on Almost The Whole World In My Hands by The Silence [All By Myself] {LoA}

Gradual Uprising {LoA}

well you made me wish that I knew more about history. Very well written, love it.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Mostly Harmless

I trust this isn’t a personal reminiscence TSS…!

It lost some momentum for me about half-way through, and I expected that mother-son confrontation to lead to some revelation or at least some nice dialogue but it just seemed to fizzle out a little…

The beginning was very enjoyable though, with some good characterisation and detail, so well done with that – MH :)
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 3 out of 5
Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

I love the historical detail, but then again i just damn love history.
The confrontation, I agree, could have had some sort of relevance, but I adore the line:

I was perfectly allowed and capable to question myself! But no other was even allowed to think that!

Made me think of myself, like how we treat our siblings.

A few corrections:
“You know this is wrong right?” Should have a comma after ‘wrong’ or it just looks weird.
And it should be “To Hell with” and not “To Hell to”

Other then that, I love the ending as well! Fantastic entry!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
Mr.Gabriel

Interesting King-Prince thing.

I’m not a huge fan of such a huge space after every line, but overlooking that it was good.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 3 out of 5
ElshaHawk (LoA)

hm, the mother’s line lost it’s impact when it was only a week…
and the fretting is only relevant when the boy is really all there is left..
however the mother’s input is a good twist…
Just not sure what to think of this. It could use some consistency.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Marli

L.O.L.I thought, what would happen if h.r.h. did this to Charlie. But then I saw it was Persia….
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Horrorfan13

I agree. It seemed to lose it’s momentum. But I’m still intrigued to know more.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 3 out of 5