Interesting, because it sends out mixed messages – prison/key and shouting/whisper seem to be polar opposites, but candle/wax and to an extent thunder/rain are one and the same, or at the very least occur at the same time…

Lots of meaning considering the brevity, though I’m not sure about the title – if this is what you use to introduce yourself then you must have some pretty high-calibre friends!

Good work – MH :)

yeah your analogies aren’t consistent, but welcome back to writing, and this is still accurate of human nature. We aren’t always consistent!

I just met a lady on the elevator, and instead of saying hi, I repeated this poem. She kicked me in the testicles and called security.

Like MH, I’m confused by the meaning you’re trying to convey. While some of these comparisons are complementary in some sense, others are at complete odds with each other. Is that the point?

Is this poem itself a metaphor for the confusion inherent in relationships? If so, I think it could have been more effectively executed.

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This is a little confusing and the title does seem a bit odd…

but I do like the prison/key part, like maybe you can save him/her.

why did i never see this.
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