there are too many people in there, too confusing, but the story moves along nicely.

I got the gist of it. I feel that Gabe was a little harsh, but i like the set up.

I didn’t have a problem following this – it moves into plot and action which is good – much better than the previous fic…

Do you name a character Gabriel in all of your stories? MH :)

Oh God what a horrendous miscarriage of rating. If I were you I would have been angry at that 2. Withdrawn and replaced as was originally intended… MH :)