Reads like a news report, which I think is the style you’re going for, so well done one pinning that down – it gives you either an interesting narrative style that you could choose to work with if you want to continue, or you could switch to third person and focus on the writer of this piece…
Either way, it’s clever, and, actually, quite a good idea – I particularly like the idea that sub-millionaires might worry where they’re going to get their next meal from – in a way you almost give the message that such enormous amounts of money are pointless.
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