This started off really interestingly, and I am slightly disappointed that you didn’t even begin to resolve the meaningful bookmark stuff, but I expect you’ll move back to that in the sequel…
Anyhoo, despite being a story of two halves, both halves worked! Nice sense of dark comedy earlier, you give the reader an almost naughty insight to this guy’s utter misery!
Mr.Gabriel
Mostly Harmless
Gradual Uprising {LoA}
John Perkins