Good grief this is horrific. Incredibly graphic, I found it more than a little disturbing – a testament to your skill…

I very much hope nobody takes reviews to heart anywhere NEAR this much – in actual fact, anything below is rarely used unless the story is actually offensive.

But, I assure myself, this is fiction. Fiction

Well done indeed! MH:)

Wow so graphic. A brilliant climax to the story. I want to know who this ficly reviewer is because my imagination automatically went to myself.
I like how this story makes me feel as if your stalking me.
Right now, I’m staring worriedly out my window…

Ooh that repetition is getting to me! Naaa-asty! This is much more gruesome than the prequel and a whole pencil better! Your description is incredible. One suggestion: “Flailing about the ground.” perhaps a “on” between the about and the the?

I’m pretty sure you’re gonna get only 5/5 for this because everyone’s gonna be too scared to down you!
You deserve all the pencils for freaking me out!
Abby x

haha, yes abby, I am scared to comment now..