Couple of niggles: needless comma in first line and you need a question mark on the third.
Sorry I’m being fussy tonight!

There’s a lot going in there and many questions reflecting inner conflict.
This is a good story. Well done
Abby x

me instead of my in the rental car sentence.
good point, why didn’t I notice that earlier? oh yeah the choppiness of ficly. :)

corrected

Is the third man the actual killer? Are we talking a grassy knoll situation here?