Wow…the beginning of something great I think. The italics of “failed” could go and “job” could be shifted to “my.”

Some of the lines are a little rocky, a couple of sentences in a row begin with “he.” BUT: I adore your last line. Great

Nice job – hope to see more of it.
Abby x

Thanks for the comments, Abby. The italics will stay where they are, as those are the words I want the character to emphasize in the conversation.

What lines are rocky? I did fix the issue with “he” starting two sentences in a row.

Nice job with this- the tension is palpable, along with Rob’s wounded pride at the end. Great dialogue.

Good tension.

Of course, I had thought he was only waiting for him cause he was gay, but then again not every story is about that. That’s just moi.

Naturally, I loved the prosecuting attorney’s personality.

A good mirror reflection projected on the accuser.

yeah, i could never be a lawyer for that reason!

Why didn’t my ‘Recent Activity’ alert me of this as soon as it was published!

A really good example of courtroom drama – I particularly like how the same tension felt at the end of the trial continues outside of the court – I always thought that lawyers wouldn’t be able to just ‘switch-off’ from work mode as soon as a case is closed…

Good work and thanks for entering – MH :)

I like the perspective of the piece. We all wonder how an attorney can defend someone they know is guilty or cause an innocent person to go to jail.
Only removing a pencil because I think that it could have used more of the defendant.

@stargazer: That is a deduction I feel is unjustified. This story is not about the defendant. It’s about Rob. It doesn’t matter if the defendant is guilty or innocent; what matters is Rob’s failure. You are, of course, entitled to your opinion. Thanks for reading!