This is a truncated version of a story that I published on my website.

Nice story. Very complete description I totally have a mental image of the scene, I would like to know more about the character, but that’s what sequels are for;)

i like it you switch tenses in the middle but frakit it was interesting.

Mighty-Joe you’re right about the tense. I’m bad about that. I’ll have to try to fix it or it will drive me crazy.