Oooh, I like it, but I don’t know if we had to cut to the chase so fast…this is only the third part of the first chapter. We got time. Let’s chill and work on more of setting up for future events. But great none the less.

I’m pretty sure she’ll get scared and not go through with it. No worries! Maybe she falls in love with him again…? It’s open for sequels…

I think there needs to be more explanation of relationships between characters on the periphery of each other’s lives… Why did she drop a $20 into the violinist’s case? Did she not notice the celebrity?

This has a decent set-up, but is a little rushed, I think this series has a capacity for fine detail rather than instant big pictures – I might join in with this at some point… MH :)

I have to agree that this was a little rushed towards the end. I agree that this could’ve used a little more detail.

A little more backstory on why she is so hostile. Otherwise, great way to keep everyone connected.

I agree with you guys. It was rushed, but I felt like the series needed a little bit of conflict. Feel free to write more on her where maybe she gets scared or something…