Oooh, I like it, but I don’t know if we had to cut to the chase so fast…this is only the third part of the first chapter. We got time. Let’s chill and work on more of setting up for future events. But great none the less.
I think there needs to be more explanation of relationships between characters on the periphery of each other’s lives… Why did she drop a $20 into the violinist’s case? Did she not notice the celebrity?
This has a decent set-up, but is a little rushed, I think this series has a capacity for fine detail rather than instant big pictures – I might join in with this at some point… MH :)
I agree with you guys. It was rushed, but I felt like the series needed a little bit of conflict. Feel free to write more on her where maybe she gets scared or something…