Hmm, well, I don’t know the names of any of those drummers, but that’s probably just me not being very well versed in pop culture.

This is really good, keep it up!

This is a nice continuation with your story. My one recommendation would be to remove the phrase “Randy was a heavy drinker” and replace it with something like “luckily” or “fortunately.” The reader is able to infer that he is a heavy drinker from the previous sentence, and spelling it out just makes it feel repetitive. Keep up the good work!

Thanks! John Bonham was the drummer for Led Zeppelin; he died from alcohol poisoning. Keith Moon was the drummer for The Who; he overdosed on horse tranquilizers and beer.

Thanks, kaellinn! It does flow better with luckily.

You get five pencils just for mentioning The Who. I agree with everyone else! Keep up the good work!

Thanks! You must be a fan of The Who?

I’m a fan of Doctor Who? hehe
I’m loving this series. keep it up.

I like Doctor Who, but they don’t show it that much in America. :/

A fan of The Who? Me? Where did you get that idea haha.

Just a hunch haha

Very nice there boss! Can I be a roadie?

Maybe, if they ever get roadies!

There is a lot of impish glinting going on.. :)
but not much else.. let’s go!

I don’t watch Doctor Who and I don’t know any of the drummers or people mentioned here.

On a brighter note, I like the character’s individuality and like how the story is moving along.