Hey guys, just wanna let you know, that this is just a rough draft. Something I came up with from the top of my head while watching the best show on earth: BONES :). So sorry if it’s not brilliant :(

I liked this one. Not a big fan f changing the rain part to snow, but it works. One thing though, should there be a question mark in the sentence:

“I used to be frightened of swings; being high up in the air with nothing under your feet?”

Since you aren’t asking a question or wondering at all.

Good take on the challenge Ari. Sentence structure is great and the storyline is lovely.

I LOVE BONES! sorry I just had a moment.
You transferred the lyrics into a story perfectly. This is pretty awesome for being just a draft.

okay just edited it. :) thanks for the advice, Gabe. i changed that :D