Good piece for giving some more back story to the series – at first I thought Cavendish would be prudish but mostly harmless – I suppose ‘tweeded terror’ dispels that thought!

All I could spot technically was that ‘irritably’ needs one less ‘l’ and one more ‘r’, but other than that I can’t see anything – creatively, you’ve pinned down Cavendish’s characterisation really nicely, and of course the punnery in the title is brilliant!

Good work, and welcome – back – to Ficly… MH :)

Ooh, I love the continuation of the style.
This is possibly my favourite series on ficly at the moment. xD
Has Niall lost his touch?
Is he in a sticky toffee situation? (Ha! I crack myself up…….)
I am looking forward to the next installment.

I agree with PJ, I really like the way you’ve almost seamlessly continued with the style and voice of the previous pieces.

As far as technical stuff, the first word in this piece should be spelled “disappointingly.” That was all I could fine, though!

I really liked the last line before the first paragraph break – it rhymed! =]

Not only was it seamless, every word was delicious! Welcome to Ficly. And may you “stick” around for more ‘sweet’ storytelling!
I loved the rhyming couplet background, and the added villainy of the candies not affecting him as they should.

oh and P.S. Tsu D’Nehm, pseudonym! hilariously clever.

Ha! Wonderfully told! I love that the rhyming couplet holds some sort of unnatural power for magical beings. I just thought it was something Cavendish did when he was upset. This introduces a delightful twist, and I love it! :)

I still need to toss another entry into this series. I need to get around to doing that sometime soon.

This was an excellent continuation of the story, and you carried on the style quite well.

My only qualm is that the break in the narration to address the reader directly for an explanation kind of pulled me out of it. I think showing that the rhyming couplets have power would have been more effective than explaining it.

Thanks for all your comments guys, glad that my return to Ficly’s started with reasonable success.
@Kaellinn, sorry if the change in narrative style bugged you a bit. I know it feels a little odd but I couldn’t resist giving a little nod to Hitchhiker’s Guide.

Anyway, thanks to you all, and watch this space!