“driver’s”, not “drivers”. Also, you must be allergic to commas. Makes this piece somewhat stream-of-consciousness. The use of commas in the first and last lines but not the body makes it seem like the narrator fell into a kind of trance as they were relating the story, and then snapped out of it. Which makes sense, really, considering the psychological trauma inherent in such an event. However, I’m unsure if this was on purpose or an accident.
The first sentence is silly. Saying, “I dont’ remember much” and then listing a bunch of stuff you remember is thematically contradictory. Also, “I remember she was driving way too fast…” is a better hook than “I don’t remember much.” A story should never start off with a character saying they don’t remember much, because we don’t want to read about what someone doesn’t remember.
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