Is this meant to be cathartic for the reader, or for the character later?

ouch! let this be a lesson to you kids..

@lastsyllable – Yes, and then some.

We all deserve a good dose of moral irony now and again. The jump required to get the title’s a little beyond me, but I won’t hold that against it.

Yech, that was brutally quick and decisive. Could have been stretched into two or three ficly’s, but I see what you were going for as a brief little morality tale sort of thing. Only critique would be the use of ’Bobby’s girlfriend’. For the most part it seems centered on Bobby, so it might feel a bit more personal to say ‘his girlfriend’. Just a thought.