Wow. Plot, characters…nicely done.

Though I was wondering…is she not moving because she’s dead? Or is she not the one being shot at? If she’s dead, maybe rephrase the last line.

Really nice, and welcome to Ficly! =]

It’s a twelve word cliff hanger! And thanks for the welcome. :]

Nice! Tension, Climax, Resolution. All the elements in 12 words.

I like it. Good imagery.

and yet, what just happened??!!