Okay, a few things.
In line 6, it should be “Violet’s” with an apostrophe.
4 lines from the end, it should be “accept” not “except.”

Another suggestion, though this is totally up to you since you’re the artist here, is that you don’t refer to Cara as Violet. They’re two people in one body, so let them each have their own name. Also, it’ll help us as readers keep track.

I’m fascinated by this series – great job, and I hope you keep going!

dude! Multiple personalities?!