It feels like you tried to squash a lot into this story – that really striking image of the man over his boss’ corpse, and some kind of back story to why he killed her could have quite easily filled one installment – taking your character from commitment, to doubt, and then throwing in a last sentence twist as well made it all a little rushed…

I enjoyed it for the premise, and for how good this could have been if you’d taken it a more leisurely pace – but I enjoyed it nonetheless – MH :)

Thanks MH. This was done on the original ficlets site, and if I remember correctly, it was following a James Bond theme. So what looks compressed here, was actually following information supplied in the challenge. (At least, I think it was.)
I do prefer stories which pack a lot into the short length, rather than multipart stories. Though I realise not everyone feels the same way.