Very smart way to complete the challenge.

she needs to consider how happy her son is, for a moment, instead of the messiness around her..
maybe she’s right, maybe eventually her son will see what she sees, or maybe she’s just a neat freak who needs to loosen up..

Interesting twist on the more traditional idea of losing a daughter. You don’t normally think of the groom’s parents being sad to see their son go so much as you think of the bride’s parents.

Taking quiet moments at work to journey through your Ficly archives, jesteram.

I thought this was pretty damn good. Then I saw the challenge it was entered for and realised how clever it was.

Well played, sir.

I, too, think this was particularly clever for the challenge. It begs for backstory to tell us what is going on with Cheryl. Is she just crazy, or does she know something we don’t?

The story is very well written, but the plot lacks creativity. It’s certainly a creative response to the challenge, though.

The writing itself is very natural, it flows well and doesn’t jar the reader. My only criticism in this regard is the end- the language could stand to be more evocative, and the fact that they were serving lobster at a wedding seemed to overwhelm the emotion.

I thought the focus on the parents’ relationship was an interesting touch.