He sounds rather caring. Nice career goals.

Haha… I really like how you’ve established his voice. It’s amusing, and a little precocious. He seems like a nice kid.

Aww, he’s really just a softie! I like the first line a lot — it shows how much he believes this will all come to pass. The fact that he wants the best for everyone else is a wonderful touch as well.

Aw. He’ll have a nice life…

The only thing I have to say about this is that it sounds a little older than eighth grade. But good work!

I will disprove that; 8th grade is 14 years old – I am 14 years old. How do you like them apples?