Comments on Tim Brooks in 25 years by Gradual Uprising {LoA}

Mr.Gabriel

Has an evil side as well as a nice side, nice.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
H.S. Wift

He hides beneath a mask to ensure a smooth ride through school. Really different person to the last interpretation, this being his soul, that being his face. Good.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
Ruby Slippers

I hate to be picky, especially because this is your challenge, but in 25 years I don’t believe he will be 25 years old, as your first line suggests. Even so, last line, perfection! (Is this what caused Dobbins’s divorce?)
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Gradual Uprising {LoA}

haha noted. my mistake
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Music-Hearted

Well, well, well. We seem to have a complicated one here. Nice work, it’s interesting how his thoughts are different from his actions.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
LMR

Wow, I would have never expected the last sentence. I guess in my head, I wouldn’t see Dobbins having an affair, but maybe a close friendship/one kiss that could have been perceived as one, perhaps.

Anyway, it’s nice to see that Tim’s got more depth to him than people think. Is he only in the sports/popularity scene because his dad expects him to be? I want to know more!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
someday_93

Hmm. I wonder if they’re actually having an affair or not…this was really good, I liked it a lot.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.