_As I landed on her bed, and motioned Jani to stop. She crossed her arms and started forward. _ I think there needs to be a comma between ‘stop’ and ‘she’ or an alteration in the first sentence. Otherwise I like where this is going!
_As I landed on her bed, and motioned Jani to stop. She crossed her arms and started forward. _ I think there needs to be a comma between ‘stop’ and ‘she’ or an alteration in the first sentence.
Otherwise I like where this is going!
Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))